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[Zeke]

Yikes. You've been around here too long -- my response lag is rubbing off on you.

[Wowbagger]

Originally Posted by Zeke

Yikes. You've been around here too long -- my response lag is rubbing off on you.

...I can't imagine what you're talking about, Zeke. And don't you dare look at the lag time on this post!

And, yeah, NAHT, I'm not in the least worried about actually that five-minute runtime. Looking at the enormous range of runtimes we've had for Excelsior eps (33min to 93min), I've clearly enjoyed the flexibility that comes with an online time slot quite a lot myself! Thanks for giving it a go!

Got your PM, will answer it as soon as I remind myself of what the heck happened back in Season One. :P

EDIT: Come to think of it, if we've got "Valandrian Expedition" through "Wildfire" covered, somebody really ought to do the season finale, "Down the Rabbit Hole." Any more takers?

[NAHTMMM]

Here's what I have at this point:

Turns of Events

Wildfire



Please feel free to correct any terminology, rank, speaker credits, etc. I messed up or was foggy about.

I've tried to keep stage directions and explicit hisses and inflections and such to a minimum. I figure you people know how to execute that stuff better than I do.

[Wowbagger]

I haven't laughed that hard for a while. Great fun. I'm making the necessary speaker credit changes. It will be very interesting converting them into a script. If I want to make any edits, I'll PM you about them, and just generally keep you posted.

Some of these scenes and characters, you just absolutely nailed:

Adow: (over the intercom) I have no idea where they went, sir. Honest. (cheerfully) But I'm pretty sure they're never coming back. (pleading) So, can I pleeeease be Chief Engineer now?

Lorhrok: Mister Hologram, you are under arrest for violating the Prime Directive.
Ensign: You have no right to do that! What if someone had taken the Babelfish away from your planet centuries ago?
Lorhrok: Huh?
Cortez: Or what if the Vulcans had removed the Monolith from Earth's moon before humans uncovered it?
Lorhrok: Are you just making things up?

Sharp: She might be dead, Alcar! Here, pump the captain full of drugs and make sure.
Dovan: Make sure of what?
Sharp: That she lives. Or possibly that she dies. I'm not picky.

Betra-Na: Oh yeah?
Serid-Gee: Yeah!
Betra-Na: (casually) Well, talk to you later.
Serid-Gee: (casually) See you soon.

Hee hee hee hee hee.

And I'll keep checking in 'til March 1st, if anyone else jumps in!

[NAHTMMM]

Glad you liked it all!

Originally Posted by Wowbagger

Lorhrok: Mister Hologram, you are under arrest for violating the Prime Directive.
Ensign: You have no right to do that! What if someone had taken the Babelfish away from your planet centuries ago?
Lorhrok: Huh?
Cortez: Or what if the Vulcans had removed the Monolith from Earth's moon before humans uncovered it?
Lorhrok: Are you just making things up?

Yeah, I was pretty pleased with how that scene turned out. The next line is probably my favorite line out of both fivers, because it looks ridiculously random but is actually a reference to a scene from The Last Starfighter where all three entities are mentioned.

Betra-Na: Oh yeah?
Serid-Gee: Yeah!
Betra-Na: (casually) Well, talk to you later.
Serid-Gee: (casually) See you soon.

This might actually be the scene I was worried most about. The original is a nice, insightful dialogue that refuses to tell the audience which side they're supposed to root for, and I could find nothing better to do with it than reduce most of it to pure scenery-chewing. *sigh* But you like it, or at least the end of it. That's a good sign.

And I'll keep checking in 'til March 1st, if anyone else jumps in!

I might give it a shot, but I don't think I'll be able to do the season finale. My creative juices need recharging, and I have other things I need to do. So I'm definitely not claiming it.


I've got KatyJane listening to the episodes now. She's enjoyed it so far as well.

[Wowbagger]

Originally Posted by NAHTMMM

Yeah, I was pretty pleased with how that scene turned out. The next line is probably my favorite line out of both fivers, because it looks ridiculously random but is actually a reference to a scene from The Last Starfighter where all three entities are mentioned.

Aha! I knew I'd heard of those before, but could not place them for the life of me.

This might actually be the scene I was worried most about. The original is a nice, insightful dialogue that refuses to tell the audience which side they're supposed to root for, and I could find nothing better to do with it than reduce most of it to pure scenery-chewing. *sigh* But you like it, or at least the end of it. That's a good sign.

That's the kindest thing anyone's ever said about that scene. Now, I agree with it, not just because it's a nice thing to hear but because it's exactly what I was trying to do with the scene... but more than one commentator said something to the effect of, "Wow, love the action in this episode, great Yubari scene, but why all the blah blah on the Vigilance?" It is among the most criticized scenes we ever made -- which isn't saying all that much, but still. So, for how the scene is perceived, you nailed it.

I've got KatyJane listening to the episodes now. She's enjoyed it so far as well.

Superlative. Glad to hear it!

And March 1st is just around the corner!

[Wowbagger]

Zeke! I know you said it was a longshot that you'd be able to do it, but before I start script-ifying and getting recording going (before the end of this week, I hope), figured I'd check back. Got anything for "The Valandrian Expedition"?