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Old 12-02-2003, 05:59 AM
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Another variation:

Neo: What did the Oracle tell you?
Morpheus: She told me I'm the Super Ohm. Â See why I like anagrams? Anyway, I've got high hopes for you.
Cypher: She told me my role in this movie got downgraded. I'll show [iost_uid0]her.[/iost_uid0]
Trinity: She said that I--
Neo: Hey, my favorite noodle house!

The downgrading being how Cypher is said to have been a failed One in an earlier version of the script. I wish I could think of something better, as I prefer not having the Spoon Boy in the first block.

There are so many good Spoon Boy blocks... this is going to be a hard vote. -- Pteryx[/colorost_uid0]
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Old 12-02-2003, 07:13 AM
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[color=#000000ost_uid0][quoteost_uid0][quoteost_uid0]
However, using "Use the forks" by itself is less likely to stand out as a SW ref.[/quoteost_uid0]

Simpsons reference, maybe. [/quoteost_uid0]

I must've missed that one. Evil Israeli TV network, not showing enough Simpsons reruns...
::mutter mutter mutter:

So what exactly was the Simpsons reference?

g-blatt - the Spaceballs reference was "Use the Schwartz."

As to your block - still way, way, way too long. Short, focused blocks, usually 3-5 lines. You'll find that the last joke in a block is usually the one with the most impact, so for example, you're kinda wasting "use the forks, dummy" by adding "Do they hurt?" afterwards... and so on for the rest, as well.

Try splitting your block into a whole bunch of small ones. For example, this:

[quoteost_uid0]Morpheus: Neo, I only can show you the door, you must walk through it.
Neo: Why, Are you afraid of doors?
Morpheus: Yes, the last one I opened had a balding agent on the other side.
Neo: Ya like thatÂ’ll ever happen again. So Morpey What did the Oracle tell you?
Morpheus: She told me that I shall stop slapping people with fish. And that I would find THE FIVE.
Neo: you mean THE ONE.
Morpheus: UmÂ… erÂ… umÂ… oh crap...
*waves hand*
Morpheus: You diden't hear that! btw have you met Spoon boy?[/quoteost_uid0]

Works much better like this:

[quoteost_uid0]Morpheus: Neo, I only can show you the door, you must walk through it.
Neo: Why, Are you afraid of doors?
Morpheus: Yes, the last one I opened had a balding agent on the other side.
Neo: Yeah, like thatÂ’ll ever happen again.

Neo: Morpheus, What did the Oracle tell you?
Morpheus: She told me that I shall stop slapping people with fish. And that I would find THE FIVE.
Neo: you mean THE ONE.
Morpheus: UmÂ… erÂ… umÂ… oh crap...
*waves hand*
Morpheus: You diden't hear that! Say, have you met Spoon boy?[/quoteost_uid0]

See the difference?[/colorost_uid0]
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Old 12-02-2003, 12:31 PM
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[quoteost_uid0="Standback"][color=#000000ost_uid0]So what exactly was the Simpsons reference?[/colorost_uid0][/quoteost_uid0]
[color=#000000ost_uid0]Episode AABF05: Mayored to the Mob

Hamill: Homer! Use the for...
Homer: The Force?
Hamill: The forks! Use the forks!
Homer: Oh.[/colorost_uid0]
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Old 12-02-2003, 12:44 PM
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]On second thought, I did see that one.[/colorost_uid0]
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Old 12-03-2003, 07:59 AM
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[color=#000000ost_uid0][quoteost_uid0]As to your block - still way, way, way too long [/quoteost_uid0]
I did say that last block was an "un-cut" version. but I know what you mean, all my blocks so far are too long. IÂ’ll get the hang of it sooner or later. Or not die trying.

well anyway here is my new streemlined block 18.(now four lines shorter)

Neo: What did the Oracle tell you?
Morpheus: She told me that I shall stop slapping people with fish. And that I would find THE FIVE.
Neo: you mean THE ONE.
Morpheus: UmÂ… erÂ… umÂ… oh crap...
*waves hand*
Morpheus: You diden't hear that! btw have you met Spoon boy?
Neo: So Spoon boy can I have a spoon?
Spoon Boy: There is no spoon. ItÂ’s simply an unconfused astroprojection of underling metaphors representing the power of will and Dillbert.
Neo: I like shiny thingsÂ…
Spoon Boy: Just bend the stupid spoon already, Kid!
Neo: How?
Spoon Boy: Use the forks, dummy.[/colorost_uid0]
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Old 12-03-2003, 03:09 PM
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Maybe split that up into two paragraphs, something like this:


Neo: What did the Oracle tell you?
Morpheus: She told me that I shall stop slapping people with fish. And that I shall find THE FIVE.
Neo: Uh, don't you mean "THE ONE"?
Morpheus: UmÂ… erÂ… umÂ… hey, look over there! Spoons!
Neo: Ooo, shiny!

Neo: Hey, Spoon Boy, can I have a spoon?
Spoon Boy: There is no spoon. You must understand that that which you perceive to be a spoon is simply an unconfused astroprojection of underlying subconscious metaphors representing the focused power of will and Dilbert.
Neo: I like shiny thingsÂ…
Spoon Boy: Oh, just bend the stupid spoon already, Kid!
Neo: How?
Spoon Boy: Use the forks, dummy.[/colorost_uid0]
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Old 12-03-2003, 05:36 PM
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Actually, the one with "The forks will be with you... always" totally cracked me up. You guys are such a hoot...[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0][quoteost_uid0]Maybe split that up into two paragraphs, something like this:
[/quoteost_uid0]
OK good Idea.

The following is the same block as before only not the same.

Neo: What did the Oracle tell you?
Morpheus: She told me that I shall stop slapping people with fish. And that I would find THE FIVE.
Neo: you mean THE ONE.
Morpheus: UmÂ… erÂ… umÂ… oh crap...
*waves hand*
Morpheus: You diden't hear that! btw have you met Spoon boy?

Neo: So Spoon boy can I have a spoon?
Spoon Boy: There is no spoon. ItÂ’s simply an unconfused astroprojection of underling metaphors representing the power of will and Dillbert.
Neo: I like shiny thingsÂ…
Spoon Boy: Just bend the stupid spoon already, Kid!
Neo: How?
Spoon Boy: Use the forks, dummy.

yah, I think its better now. thanks.[/colorost_uid0]
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Old 12-10-2003, 09:56 PM
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Do you know, I'll bet that this is still going by next Christmas. Anyway, I say let's have a final vote already! And next time Zeke, don't say anything about it going quickly - it seems to have the opposite effect. A bit like 'soon', really....[/colorost_uid0]
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Old 12-10-2003, 10:59 PM
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]He said that the forum server would be back up "shortly." [/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Wasn't that Kira?

What I'm wondering about is, that once there was a note on the front page saying the forums were down, they were already back up. :eyeroll:[/colorost_uid0]
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Old 12-11-2003, 12:46 AM
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]^ One, yes that was me. It's me until Zeke identifies himself... and there's something really big coming out next week from me, so I'll be at the helm for a while. Two, I put the notice up last night when I had someone email me about the forums, and although they were back up this morning I didn't feel like updating the site from work.[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Now that the forums are back, lets move this along and decide on this block[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Man, this block is taking [iost_uid0]forever[/iost_uid0].[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Alright, following the hiatus, let me be the first the remind people what the considered blocks are. My own vote is for this:

[quoteost_uid0]
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] So what did the Oracle tell you?
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] She told me I'm the Super Ohm. 'Cause, you see, when you scramble it all up -- well, anyway, I've got high hopes for you.
[bost_uid0]Boy:[/bost_uid0] She told me there is no spoon.
[bost_uid0]Trinity:[/bost_uid0] She said that I--
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] Shush, Trin. Can't you see the boy's telling me about his spoon?

[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] So what's the deal with the spoon?
[bost_uid0]Boy:[/bost_uid0] There is no spoon.
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] Are there forks?
[bost_uid0]Boy:[/bost_uid0] Yes, Neo. The forks will be with you... always.
[/quoteost_uid0]

Trust me, you all loved it.


Well, actually, there were a whole bunch of proposed variations, most of which involved noodles. Other than that, the only contenders seemed to be the various detailed descriptions of the sordid fates of the previous five Ones, which I think we kinda agreed to leave out, since they kinda left them out of the actual movie, in a technical sort of way.

There's also g-blatt's uncut version (above). I think that covers it.

Votes? Tweaks? New blocks? Pie?[/colorost_uid0]
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[quoteost_uid0="Standback"][color=#000000ost_uid0]Man, this block is taking [iost_uid0]forever[/iost_uid0].[/colorost_uid0][/quoteost_uid0]
[color=#000000ost_uid0]Only if you count the forum downtime... I assume you meant that humourously, though.[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]But of course. When was the last time I intended things humorlessly?[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]The forks still do it for me, no matter how wrong that sounds.[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]It does sound wrong. But I agree.[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]I'll go along with Standback's version.[/colorost_uid0]
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