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Old 04-16-2003, 09:52 AM
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]This is all I've come up with...

[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] Guess what, Cypher! We've brought Trinity a love interest!
[bost_uid0]Cypher:[/bost_uid0] Hmmm. I recommend keeping him sluggish and disoriented, sticking him full of needles like a pincushion, and refusing to tell him what year it is.
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] Heh, heh, heh.

However, I lend my full support to the line: [quoteost_uid0]That's your acting skills. You've never used them before.[/quoteost_uid0][/colorost_uid0]
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Old 04-16-2003, 02:07 PM
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Or we could combine Derek's scene with the running gag:

[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] Wha--? Where am I?
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] The question isn't "where?", Neo. It's--
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] "Follow the white rabbit who?"
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] Shut up, Neo. The appropriate question is, "When?".
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] Oh. When?
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] I can't tell you. Temporal Prime Directive.[/colorost_uid0]

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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Combining Neo being stupid, the knock-knock joke, [iost_uid0]and[/iost_uid0] a TPD joke? How can you lose?

The only change I'd make would be to have Neo say "When am I?" instead of just "When?".[/colorost_uid0]
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Morpheus: No, you are on Voyager.
Neo: Dang, im on a lost ship.
Morpheus: No Neo, we are underneath the ground on Earth.
Neo: So we are trying to reach the Core to save the world?
Morpheus: Reach the Core? No. Save the world? Yep[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0][quoteost_uid0="Zeke"]"cypher" is an older word for the digit 0.[/quoteost_uid0]
I'm thinking maybe we can still include that reference in a later scene. Perhaps something like this:

[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] Ha! Neo - 1, Cypher - 0!

Perhaps there could also be a Dr. Nick reference:

[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] Now this won't hurt a bit - until I jam this in your neck!

Oh, and I like Standback's version, with Kira's adaptations.[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0][quoteost_uid0]The only change I'd make would be to have Neo say "When am I?" instead of just "When?". [/quoteost_uid0]

That was actually intentional, meant to make Neo sound more stupid, as in, "Oh. Umm... 'When?'" If we can find a phrasing that makes that work, great, if not, that's fine too.[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0][quoteost_uid0][bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] Wha--? Where am I?
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] The question isn't "where?", Neo. It's--
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] "Follow the white rabbit who?"
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] Shut up, Neo. The appropriate question is, "When?"
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] Oh. "When?"
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] I can't tell you. Temporal Prime Directive.
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] What?
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] Sigh.[/quoteost_uid0][/colorost_uid0]
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[quoteost_uid0="Standback"][color=#000000ost_uid0]That was actually intentional, meant to make Neo sound more stupid, as in, "Oh. Umm... 'When?'" If we can find a phrasing that makes that work, great, if not, that's fine too.[/colorost_uid0][/quoteost_uid0]
[color=#000000ost_uid0]The more I think about your version, Standback, the more I like it! I'd say keep it the way it is then.

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[color=#000000ost_uid0]That works for me. I'm a tiny bit disapointed that hardly anyone seems to like my 'acting skills' line, as I though it was rather good. I [iost_uid0]am[/iost_uid0] somewhat baised though.[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Actually, I, a staunch disser of Keanu Reeves, did like it. I just like the overall jokes in some of the other scenes better. [/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0][quoteost_uid0]I'm a tiny bit disapointed that hardly anyone seems to like my 'acting skills' line, as I though it was rather good. [/quoteost_uid0]

I thought it was good to, especially since you stole it off me :P

However, I can see which way the prevailing winds are blowing. Good job, Derek.[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0][quoteost_uid0="Sa'ar Chasm"]I thought it was good to, especially since you stole it off me :P[/quoteost_uid0]
Come, come, Sa'ar... isn't that what FBC is all about?

[quoteost_uid0="Sa'ar Chasm"]However, I can see which way the prevailing winds are blowing. Good job, Derek.[/quoteost_uid0]

So, just to clarify, the scene we're all sort of leaning towards is this one, right?

[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] Wha--? Where am I?
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] The question isn't "where?", Neo. It's--
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] "Follow the white rabbit who?"
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] Shut up, Neo. The appropriate question is, "When?".
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] Oh. When?
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] I can't tell you. Temporal Prime Directive.[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Hmmm. Not bad for a kinda-debut... :eyeroll:

Shame about the acting-skills line, though - I really liked it, too. I tried to patch it intothe knock-knock scene, but it didn't work well.[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]There will be plenty of time to mock the non-existant acting skills of Mr. Reeves.[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]In that case, I'll vote for this version.

Maybe we can even get in a "wood" reference later. [/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0] just in case anybody is unfamiliar with this...

http://www.rinkworks.com/movieaminute/m/matrix.shtml[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0][quoteost_uid0]Hey everybody, look! Look at me! I'm in a movie that doesn't suck! [/quoteost_uid0]

Hmm... I happened to be quite a big fan of [iost_uid0]Bill and Ted[/iost_uid0]

And, yes - the Kira clarified scene looks good to me as well [/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Can we move on to Block 10 yet? That one looks like it'll be a lotta work...[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]I'd say almost, but we need to include Neo's being plugged in. A couple of lines will do. I suggest this:

Neo: Well, at least you finished the acupuncture.
Morpheus: Not quite yet. *jams a jack into the back of Neo's neck*

Now back to waiting for FFT chapter 4 to get posted... -- Pteryx[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0][quoteost_uid0="Guest"]I'd say almost, but we need to include Neo's being plugged in. A couple of lines will do. I suggest this:

Neo: Well, at least you finished the acupuncture.
Morpheus: Not quite yet. *jams a jack into the back of Neo's neck*[/quoteost_uid0]

I dunno; I suppose it's all right. I had an earlier attempt at this, but it was longish and frankly rather weird. Several others have attempted it as well, though.

[quoteost_uid0]Now back to waiting for FFT chapter 4 to get posted[/quoteost_uid0]
I like the sound of that! [/colorost_uid0]
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