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However, using "Use the forks" by itself is less likely to stand out as a SW ref.[/quote
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Simpsons reference, maybe. [/quote
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I must've missed that one. Evil Israeli TV network, not showing enough Simpsons reruns...
::mutter mutter mutter:
So what exactly was the Simpsons reference?
g-blatt - the Spaceballs reference was "Use the Schwartz."
As to your block - still way, way, way too long. Short, focused blocks, usually 3-5 lines. You'll find that the last joke in a block is usually the one with the most impact, so for example, you're kinda wasting "use the forks, dummy" by adding "Do they hurt?" afterwards... and so on for the rest, as well.
Try splitting your block into a whole bunch of small ones. For example, this:
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ost_uid0]Morpheus: Neo, I only can show you the door, you must walk through it.
Neo: Why, Are you afraid of doors?
Morpheus: Yes, the last one I opened had a balding agent on the other side.
Neo: Ya like thatll ever happen again. So Morpey What did the Oracle tell you?
Morpheus: She told me that I shall stop slapping people with fish. And that I would find THE FIVE.
Neo: you mean THE ONE.
Morpheus: Um
er
um
oh crap...
*waves hand*
Morpheus: You diden't hear that! btw have you met Spoon boy?[/quote
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Works much better like this:
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ost_uid0]Morpheus: Neo, I only can show you the door, you must walk through it.
Neo: Why, Are you afraid of doors?
Morpheus: Yes, the last one I opened had a balding agent on the other side.
Neo: Yeah, like thatll ever happen again.
Neo: Morpheus, What did the Oracle tell you?
Morpheus: She told me that I shall stop slapping people with fish. And that I would find THE FIVE.
Neo: you mean THE ONE.
Morpheus: Um
er
um
oh crap...
*waves hand*
Morpheus: You diden't hear that! Say, have you met Spoon boy?[/quote
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See the difference?[/color
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